In each instance, give specific examples and explain to what extent these characters have improved the control of their own lives by the end of the play.
Remember that your thesis needs to show your conclusions about a subject.
If your thesis expresses more than one idea, then you might confuse your readers about the subject of your paper.
For example: This is a weak thesis statement because the reader can't decide whether the paper is about marketing on the Internet or web pages.
Troy disapproves of Lyons’ musical goals and Cory’s football ambitions to the point where the reader can notice Troy’s illogical way of releasing his displeasures.
Frank Rich’s 1985 review of Fences in the New York Times argues that Troy’s constant anger is not irrational, but expected.
Throughout the play, Troy constantly feels the need to control the lives of others.
Analyze how Troy controls--or tries to control--the lives of Rose, Cory, and Gabriel.
Hint: a great many clear and engaging thesis statements contain words like "because," "since," "so," "although," "unless," and "however." A thesis statement should show exactly what your paper will be about, and will help you keep your paper to a manageable topic.
For example, if you write a paper on hunger, you might say: This is a weak thesis statement for two major reasons.